Doctors and Editing :)

Great combo. huh… 😦

Oh well, so I’m due back to the docs today for another BP check and weigh in, I’m not so happy about it, but hey ho.

It is really, really difficult to keep healthy and work in the job I am. But more so, it is really, really difficult to not return to old behaviours.

I am hoping that I have lost a little, although I’ve tried not to really stress over it, this last couple of weeks at home have been difficult. And it has also been difficult to keep to a healthy regime. When there is a nice bacon butty staring you in the face, kinda hard to go for a turkey one.

Had my second session with E.J last night, it went very well. She’s a lovely teacher and I admire her for doing the job she does.

I learned so much more about how and why I write as I do. I’ve always known I write things backwards, well working at my paragraphs yesterday also showed that. I get things in the wrong order and need to really address the point of each paragraph for its merit.

So, changes that I’ve been making are good, but I also saw another different way of working through some things too.

I’m going to give it another go on my next 10 pages or so, and then see how I’m progressing again.

Homework too, is to read a dictionary. Need to buy one first. lol.

Hope you all are having a fab day, and lets hope the nurse goes easy on me… and that my BP is okay.

Dawn x

 

Edit….  Lost the required amount of weight, 🙂 Not so sure if I am happy though. Blood  pressure is down. I am happy about that. 🙂

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Abuse :(

I don’t really want to post too much about this. But seeing I had an ‘incident’ at work. It has sort of left me just feeling weird. 

 

Everyone wonders how they’ll react in certain situations. A girl surrounded by a bunch of guys, you know that sort of story… 

 

Well I found myself in one that I hope never happens again. 

 

It went like this. 

 

Stopping my butty van at a paticular stop, I had a couple of my regular guys come over to buy their dinner. Nothing wrong with that. 

 

Then two others came across that I didn’t know. Someone drove past and simply said ‘I’ll give the first one to plant her on the lips fifty quid’ 

 

I didn’t expect anyone to jump at me, but that is what happened. I did fight the guy, but ended up hurting my neck in the process. 

 

Next time, I should just ‘plant a head butt’ and not worry about the ‘assault’ being on my end. Better the other party be injured than me. 

 

To be really honest, it left me shaken and upset. I didn’t know the guy, but what makes people react like that. You get a bunch of people together and somehow it ends up being something it shouldn’t. 

 

I’ve not had the mindset to do any editing today. I’ve emailed E.J the edits I’ve done so that at least we have something to look over and see how I’ve done tomorrow. 

 

So, I’m going to leave you with a few questions…

What would you do in that situation?

How do you think you might react?

What do you think I could do to protect myself in future? 

 

Have a good evening all. 

 

D x x 

 

Editing and my first page… :)

I wanted to share today how working with E.J changed my first page.

E.J asked me why I started my story there. My answer… because it ‘seemed’ the best place. It might change again yet. 🙂

 

Apparently I ‘Tell’ very well, but I don’t ‘Show’ enough. I can’t totally blame my lack of schooling for this, because I’ve read and read ‘how’ to books and been to college. But things sometimes don’t click with me.

This is what I had first written.  (teaser alert) lol

 

——————————— Extract from The Secret King – The Beginning – Chapter One – Evacuation

 

Kendro eased himself into his favourite chair. It creaked just as it always did and he wished he could take it with him. His office, empty, didn’t resemble home anymore. Sadness washed over him. It was over and they had to leave everything but their prized possessions behind.

The handmade wooden desk before him had been in his family for generations and he ran his hand along its surface until he found a tiny dent. He frowned and remembered the day he’d made that hole. The day Admiral Broki confirmed the fate of their Sun and he’d dropped a hot steaming mug of tea over everything. Now apart from the desk and set of chairs nothing else cluttered the room. All his belongings had been moved to the mother-ship. The furniture here deemed unimportant. Although why he’d deemed it unimportant shook him. These objects were a part of his history.

Resting his head in his arms, he closed his eyes just for a brief moment of thought. Were they going to survive the incredible journey ahead? Could they leave their solar system and their enemy the Zefron far behind them? He hoped so, or they wouldn’t have a future at all. His breathing slowed and he had to shake himself, to keep awake. He had to be strong enough to fight it off, at least for another twelve hours or so. He hadn’t had any sleep at all since the day he ordered the evacuation to begin, and he had started to feel the strain of being constantly awake. Sleep beckoned to him, but he fought it once again.

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With some work, this is what we ended up with. E.J helped me to understand the difference. And I know why I tend to tell instead of show. In script writing it is drummed into us to get rid of any words ending with an ‘ing’…  In novel writing I need to learn to embrace them.

 

——————————— NEW extract from The Secret King – The Beginning – Chapter One – Evacuation

 

Kendro eased himself into his favourite chair for the last time. Its joints creaked just as they always did; yet some things had to be sacrificed. His office, empty, didn’t resemble home anymore. Sadness washed over him. Life here was over. They must leave everything behind, even prized possessions.

The handmade wooden desk sprawled before him; in his family for generations, the history it must have witnessed. He ran his hand along its surface until he found the tiny dent. Remembering the day he’d made that hole, a year ago. The day Admiral Broki confirmed the fate of their Sun. Kendro’d dropped a hot mug of tea over everything. The electronics of the huge desk sparked and crackled, a preview of the fate of the planet once the sun fed on itself; nothing would survive.

Now apart from the desk and set of chairs nothing else cluttered the room. All his belongings had been moved to the mother-ship. The furniture here deemed unimportant. Although why he’d deemed them unimportant shook him. These objects were a part of his history.

Resting his head in his arms, Kendro closed his eyes for just a brief moment of thought. His people must survive this incredible journey ahead. Could they leave their solar system and their enemy the Zefron far behind them? He hoped so, or they wouldn’t have a future at all.

His breathing slowed and he shook himself, to keep awake. He had to be strong enough to fight, to remain functional for at least another twelve hours. Awake for three days now, no sleep at all since he ordered the evacuation, Kendo felt the strain of being conscious too long. Sleep beckoned, but he fought it once again.

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The difference is quite amazing isn’t it?

 

I’ve had fin this weekend. Researching and learning, and more importantly for me, trying to implement the lessons I learned with E.J.

 

I gave it my best shot and although I’m not comfortable just yet with the ‘ing’ words, I can see and feel why they make things better.

 

This might take me a little longer than I first planned. But, I will get there.  🙂

I wanted to ‘show’ you all what the difference working with someone makes to your work. And at present, I am thrilled to be working with someone who is patient, professional and brilliant.

 

Huge thanks to E.J 🙂 Please check her out…. http://ejrunyon.wordpress.com/ but don’t all try and nab her at once…. lol

 

Happy writing all.

 

Dawn 🙂 x

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Back to normal :)

It’s been a very strange week. Exciting in more ways than one, hard work in others, (like all the snow) lol…. but all is good. 

 

The reason I made my blog private has worked. I actually got an apology and I understand now… ED’s are a strange way of life, hard, unbearable at times. And so I am going to move forward and hopefully put that little hicup behind me. As weird as it was. 

 

Good start to the day, all the snow has gone. Although it has been replaced with flooding instead. 

 

Editing is going well, and I am looking forward to my next session with E.J on wed 🙂 

 

Catch you all later. 

 

Dawn x 

Why Private? :(

Okay, so this will be pretty short. I’ve made my blog private for now, I might keep it that way. I am unsure at the moment and it will depend on how many people will still follow me.

I guess we’ll see how it goes. But attention from a couple of sources that I don’t want has discouraged me from posting about ‘certain’ subjects.

Eating disorders are tough to deal with. I know this, but I’m no doctor either. One reason why I didn’t ever put ‘Lost Innocence’ on youtube. It’s triggering and it can be abused.

I don’t want my blog to be abused, By anyone.

Cyber stalking and bullying are ripe. But no matter, I left my blog open for a while hoping that it would stop, but it clearly isn’t. So for now, only certain people can have access.

Post for you later.

Dawn x